tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3731978491355560966.post3797859796772003550..comments2024-03-25T22:06:48.964-04:00Comments on The Zombie Knight Saga: Page 10George M. Frosthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02775956087855415064noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3731978491355560966.post-1737175115823668982014-09-25T23:44:04.360-04:002014-09-25T23:44:04.360-04:00Phalanx also refers to the bones in the fingers an...Phalanx also refers to the bones in the fingers and toes. Phalange and phalanx are more or less interchangeable.George M. Frosthttp://thezombieknight.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3731978491355560966.post-42004184104568494142014-09-25T23:21:10.665-04:002014-09-25T23:21:10.665-04:00shouldn't that be "phalange" bone? P...shouldn't that be "phalange" bone? Phalanx is an infantry formation.<br /><br /><br />...the ghost of typos past...Lord Ericnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3731978491355560966.post-39488862450084746652014-08-05T05:08:46.171-04:002014-08-05T05:08:46.171-04:00Thank you so much, Frost, for explaining the link ...Thank you so much, Frost, for explaining the link between Hector and Garovel. And especially going in depth about what makes Hector what he is right now (he could effectively go underwater without breathing!) instead of just saying "It's MAGIC!" I can't stand when stories don't take the time to explain certain aspects properly. I find it very poor storytelling, so I very much appreciate what you did here Frost.Blaednoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3731978491355560966.post-378643611405639282014-03-30T20:26:40.413-04:002014-03-30T20:26:40.413-04:00Strangely enough, it's a fact that most suicid...Strangely enough, it's a fact that most suicides don't want to die. It can be a cry for help, attention, or even just a means of feeling alive by <br /><br />approaching the threshold of death. Hector actually is a fairly good example of a failed suicide attempt. I wouldn't be surprised if George Frost has studied psychology.RandAnimanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3731978491355560966.post-920467779712326162014-01-19T21:20:23.315-05:002014-01-19T21:20:23.315-05:00Okay....here's the thing. Half of what I see s...Okay....here's the thing. Half of what I see suggests Hector committed suicide. One doesn't generally slash both arms with a razor by accident. But the initial out of body conversation, and other things afterwards, sure don't make it sound like Hector intended to die. I'm not sure if one of the two impressions is a mistake, or you intend to complicate things somehow to accommodate both...except I just have a hard time imagining how you could do that. It's just hard to believe Hector hadn't planned his death from here. It is, however, increasingly clear he is the sort of person at risk for suicide: the right age, the right living conditions. If he committed suicide and then regretted it, that would still feel slightly at odds with the impressions you've given at various points so far, and some editing to smooth that out might be a good idea.<br /><br />To keep that criticism in context, I'll add this is well written and reasonably interesting so far (I haven't gotten that far in, after all, but there's solid ideas, good thought behind the fantasy, the balance between explanation and 'magic!' is very nice, tilted somewhat more towards explanation but not so far you start tripping yourself up). It's just I would have waited a lot longer to start giving feedback - given things time to properly shape up - if not for that suicide issue niggling at me.Z.n. Singernoreply@blogger.com